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SMOKING KILLS

September 28, 2008

Cough, Cough. Would you please stop smoking here? Many people smoke a lot nowadays, mainly in big cities, where they live chaotic lives. To change this situation, in August of 2008 the governor of São Paulo forwarded a new project of life in which the population is prohibited from smoking cigarettes, cigar, pipes and cigarillo in every establishment of the state, including bars, restaurants and discos. This new law, besides helping non-smokers to continue their daily routine without any uncomfortable smoke, helps smokers to reduce the number of cigarettes per day, since they will be moving to a non-smoking place. And also decreases the development of cancers, respiratory and cardiovascular diseases caused by this chemical dependence.  

By this law, the government is trying to take care of non-smokers. These passive smokers suffer many consequences without being responsible for them. Some companies, such as Globo find this idea interesting, so in August 29th, 2008, non-smokers are relieved from the smoke there, while the smokers who work at Globo dislike his decision and are complaining, because don’t know how to quit smoking, where they were free to smoke in the day before, they felt like an engineer without his calculator. Even so, Globo maintained the same position, because the main reason of this campaign is that people can get addicted to tobacco without choosing to do so.

People won´t smoke the same amount they smoked before, because it would be prohibited to smoke in nightclubs and pubs, where people usually smoke a lot. The scenario will change, besides smoking while talking/dancing with friend, smokers will need to move to a restrict area for them, so that they wouldn’t smoke one after other. The same measurement was successful when established in Canada, England and Australia. Taking these countries as a model, Brazil is driving the right way to improve health.

The government states that this measurement is not only about ostracizing tobacco addicts, but it is also aimed at promoting the quality of life resulting in increased of life expectation. The National Institute of Cancer says that twenty-two people die per hour as victims of extreme squeal of tobacco and The Nica points out that seven non-smokers die per day because of living with addicted. For instance, people who live in farms, which can easily breathe fresh air, have better lungs compared to a person that lives in polluted towns. As other consequence, the numbers of cancers because of tobacco are expected to decrease and if this really happens, the Estate will be able to spend less money and time on health and strongly invest in education.

Therefore, the city hall must prioritize health, which is necessary to people life, so as to help noon-smokers from smoke, the new law has been projected. The purpose of this law is to make smokers reduce the amount of cigarettes per day, to improve cancers development together with giving quality of life to non-smokers. So eventually people will hear the Cough, Cough sound.

 

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  1. Cough, Cough. Would you please stop smoking here? Many people smoke a lot nowadays, mainly in big cities, where they live chaotic lives. To change this situation, in August of 2008, the governor of São Paulo forwarded a new project of life in which the population is prohibited from smoking cigarettes, cigar, pipes and cigarillo in every establishment of the state, including bars, restaurants and discos. This new law, besides helping non-smokers to continue their daily routine without any uncomfortable smoke, helps smokers to reduce the number of cigarettes per day, since they will be moving to a non-smoking place, and also, it decreases the development of cancers, respiratory and cardiovascular diseases caused by this chemical dependence.

    By this law, the government is trying to take care of non-smokers. These passive smokers suffer many consequences without being responsible for them. Some companies, such as Globo find this idea interesting, so in August 29th, 2008, non-smokers are relieved from the smoke there (how?). Meanwhile, smokers who work at Globo disliked the decision and are complaining about it, because they don’t know how to quit smoking. They were free to smoke the day before, and they felt like an engineer without his calculator. Even so, Globo maintained the same position, because the main reason of this campaign is for people can get addicted to tobacco without choosing to do so (I don’t get your last sentence).

    (You need a transition word here. And where is your topic sentence?) As a consequence, people won´t smoke the same amount they smoked before because it would be prohibited to smoke in nightclubs and pubs, where people usually smoke a lot. The scenario will change (What do you mean here?) Besides smoking while talking/dancing with friends, smokers will need to move to a restrict area for them so that they wouldn’t smoke one after other. The same measurement was successful when established in Canada, England and Australia. Taking these countries as a model (How did it work in those countries?), Brazil is driving the right way to improve health.

    The government states that this measurement is not only about ostracizing tobacco addicts, but it is also aimed at promoting the quality of life resulting in increased of life expectation. The National Institute of Cancer says that twenty-two people die per hour as victims of extreme squeal of tobacco and The Nica points out that seven non-smokers die per day because of living with the addicted (Isn’t this last sentence support for your second topic?). For instance, people who live on farms can easily breathe fresh air, have better lungs compared to a person who lives in polluted towns. As a consequence, the numbers of cancers because of tobacco are expected to decrease and if this (this what?) really happens, the Estate will be able to spend less money and time on health and strongly invest in education. (By how much?)

    Therefore, the city hall must prioritize health, which is necessary to people’s lives so as to help non-smokers from the unwanted smoke. The purpose of this law is to make smokers reduce the amount of cigarettes they smoke per day and to prevent the development of cancer altogether by giving quality of life to non-smokers. So eventually people will not hear the cough, cough sound any longer.

    Content: 4 / 5
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    Vocabulary: 5 / 5
    Grammar: 4 / 5
    Mechanics: 4 / 5

    Final Grade: 20 /25



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