Late clock
September 26, 2008(By Alexandre and Renata)
Sleep deprivation can result in nuclear explosions. This is what happened in Chernobyl, Ucrania in April 1986. Along with the huge pressure to complete the tasks within deadlines, the staff was forced to lose hours of sleep in order to maintain their jobs, resulting in lack of attention with the security system and an overheated reactor. The capitalist culture of “24 hours/7 days of week” has been leading some people to shorten their period of sleep. Bad quality of sleep could offer risks for the human beings, such as cognitive impairment, emotional disturbances and memory disorders.
First, the lack of sleeping quality may result in problems to the human’s cognitive system. In this situation, attention and capacity of concentration are sharply decreased and time of reaction is greatly slowed due to the fact that during the sleep, important hormones, which are related to judgment, impulse control, attention and visual association, act on the prefrontal cortex. For example, on Mar 25th 1989, Exxon Valdez, an oil tanker, shocked towards a reef at the Alasca shore and two hundred million liters of oil were spilled in the ocean. (CONTINUATION OF # 1…)
#2
Third, while some people may believe that a good night sleep is not related to the learning process, studies showed that wakefulness impairs the consolidation of memory. The mechanism was studied by scientists at the University of Pennsylvania. The findings provided evidence that sleep helps regulate neuronal function in the hippocampus, which is responsible for spatial orientation and recognition of physical surroundings, known as contextual memory. According to the study, memory consolidation happens over a period of hours after training for a task, and certain cellular processes have to occur at precise times.
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A Late clock
Sleep deprivation can result in nuclear explosions. This is what happened in Chernobyl, Ucrania in April 1986. Along with the huge pressure to complete the tasks within deadlines, the staff was forced to lose hours of sleep in order to maintain their jobs, resulting in lack of attention with the security system and an overheated reactor. The capitalist culture of 24/7 has been leading some people to shorten their period of sleep. Bad quality sleep offers risks to the human beings, such as cognitive impairment, emotional disturbances and memory disorders.
First, the lack of quality of sleep may result in problems to the human’s cognitive system. In this situation, the attention and the capacity of concentration are sharply decreased and the time of reaction is greatly slowed due to the fact that during the sleep, important hormones, which are related to judgment, impulse control, attention and visual association, act on the prefrontal cortex. For example, on Mar 25th 1989, Exxon Valdez, an oil tanker, shocked towards a reef on the Alasca shore and two hundred million liters of oil were spilled in the ocean. (CONTINUATION OF # 1…) (OK)
#2 (OK)
Third, while some people may believe that a good night sleep is not related to the learning process, studies showed that wakefulness impairs the consolidation of memory. The mechanism was studied by scientists at the University of Pennsylvania. The findings provided evidence that sleep helps regulate neuronal function in the hippocampus, which is responsible for spatial orientation and recognition of physical surroundings, known as contextual memory. According to the study, memory consolidation happens over a period of hours after training for a task, and certain cellular processes have to occur at precise times. (Example? Concluding sentence?)
Also, who wrote this third paragraph?
Here is the temporary grade for both of you.
I am taking into account only what you have written. Obviously, you still need to finish the paper to guarantee this grade.
Content: 4 / 5 (There are examples missing from the third point and the concluding sentences for both the first and the third paragraphs.)
Structure: 5 / 5
Vocabulary: 5 / 5
Grammar: 5 / 5
Mechanics: 5 / 5
Total: 24/ 25
A Late clock
Sleep deprivation can result in nuclear explosions. This is what happened in Chernobyl, Ucrania in April 1986. Along with the huge pressure to complete the tasks within deadlines, the staff was forced to lose hours of sleep in order to maintain their jobs, resulting in lack of attention with the security system and an overheated reactor. The capitalist culture of 24/7 has been leading some people to shorten their period of sleep. Bad quality sleep offers risks to the human beings, such as cognitive impairment, emotional disturbances and memory disorders.
First, the lack of quality of sleep may result in problems to the human’s cognitive system. In this situation, the attention and the capacity of concentration are sharply decreased and the time of reaction is greatly slowed due to the fact that during the sleep, important hormones, which are related to judgment, impulse control, attention and visual association, act on the prefrontal cortex. For example, on Mar 25th 1989, Exxon Valdez, an oil tanker, shocked towards a reef on the Alasca shore and two hundred million liters of oil were spilled in the ocean. (End of the example…) Thus, (# 1: Concluding sentence…)
#2 (Alexandre)
Third, while some people may believe that a good night sleep is not related to the learning process, studies showed that wakefulness impairs the consolidation of memory. The mechanism was studied by scientists at the University of Pennsylvania. The findings provided evidence that sleep helps regulate neuronal function in the hippocampus, which is responsible for spatial orientation and recognition of physical surroundings, known as contextual memory. According to the study, memory consolidation happens over a period of hours after training for a task, and certain cellular processes have to occur at precise times. For instance, researchers at Beth Israel Deaconess Medical Center (BIDMC) conduct a trial with twelve healthy, college-aged individuals who were taught a sequence of skilled finger movements, similar to playing a piano scale. The subjects were assessed after a 12- hour period of either wake or sleep, respectively, on their ability to recall these finger movements while an Magnetic Resonance Imaging measured the activity of their brain. The end result is that skills such as learning to talk, to coordinate limbs and interpreting sensory and perceptual information become more automatic and require the use of fewer conscious brain regions to be accomplished when the subjects had had a good night of sleep. In conclusion, prioritize studying over sleeping can be less efficacious than expected, since memory consolidation is strictly related to good hours of sleep.
A Late clock
Sleep deprivation can result in nuclear explosions. This is what happened in Chernobyl, Ucrania in April 1986. Along with the huge pressure to complete the tasks within deadlines, the staff was forced to lose hours of sleep in order to maintain their jobs, resulting in lack of attention with the security system and an overheated reactor. The capitalist culture of 24/7 has been leading some people to shorten their period of sleep. Bad quality sleep offers risks to the human beings, such as cognitive impairment, emotional disturbances and memory disorders.
First, the lack of quality of sleep may result in problems to the human’s cognitive system. In this situation, the attention and the capacity of concentration are sharply decreased and the time of reaction is greatly slowed due to the fact that during the sleep, important hormones, which are related to judgment, impulse control, attention and visual association, act on the prefrontal cortex. For example, on Mar 25th 1989, Exxon Valdez, an oil tanker, shocked towards a reef on the Alasca shore and two hundred million liters of oil were spilled in the ocean. Such a tragedy would probably have been avoided with a proper preparation. Sleeping hours should not be reduced before realizations of such colossal tasks, otherwise the risks of mistakes rise, and may leave fatal consequences to the environment.
In a second instance, lack of sleep influences a lot the human’s mood during the day. While sleeping our body produces some hormones, like GH(growing hormone) which are responsible to the body’s maintenance. With less hormones and less energy ,in order to compensate this situation more cortizol is produced. This hormone is responsible for providing energy and keep the human awake.However, it is also the cortizol that generates stress, producing more of this hormone means being more stressed, consequently, more aggressive. It seems obvious that sleep is related with social relationships now. A research made by a group of pshychologists from USP
showed that at the work environment people who stated good relationship with the work group are 20-30% more efficient at work. As a result, it’s reasonable to affirm that good sleep is very significant to job performance.
Third, while some people may believe that a good night sleep is not related to the learning process, studies showed that wakefulness impairs the consolidation of memory. The mechanism was studied by scientists at the University of Pennsylvania. The findings provided evidence that sleep helps regulate neuronal function in the hippocampus, which is responsible for spatial orientation and recognition of physical surroundings, known as contextual memory. According to the study, memory consolidation happens over a period of hours after training for a task, and certain cellular processes have to occur at precise times. For instance, researchers at Beth Israel Deaconess Medical Center (BIDMC) conduct a trial with twelve healthy, college-aged individuals who were taught a sequence of skilled finger movements, similar to playing a piano scale. The subjects were assessed after a 12- hour period of either wake or sleep, respectively, on their ability to recall these finger movements while an Magnetic Resonance Imaging measured the activity of their brain. The end result is that skills such as learning to talk, to coordinate limbs and interpreting sensory and perceptual information become more automatic and require the use of fewer conscious brain regions to be accomplished when the subjects had had a good night of sleep. In conclusion, prioritize studying over sleeping can be less efficacious than expected, since memory consolidation is strictly related to good hours of sleep.
A late clock
(Alexandre and Renata) Sleep deprivation can result in nuclear explosions. This is what happened in Chernobyl, Ucrania in April 1986. Along with the huge pressure to complete the tasks within deadlines, the staff was forced to lose hours of sleep in order to maintain their jobs, resulting in lack of attention with the security system and an overheated reactor. The capitalist culture of 24/7 has been leading some people to shorten their period of sleep. Bad quality sleep offers risks to the human beings, such as cognitive impairment, emotional disturbances and memory disorders.
(Alexandre and Renata) First, the lack of quality of sleep may result in problems to the human’s cognitive system. In this situation, the attention and the capacity of concentration are sharply decreased and the time of reaction is greatly slowed due to the fact that during the sleep, important hormones, which are related to judgment, impulse control, attention and visual association, act on the prefrontal cortex. For example, on Mar 25th 1989, Exxon Valdez, an oil tanker, shocked towards a reef on the Alasca shore and two hundred million liters of oil were spilled in the ocean. The tragedy was related to overwork and few hours of sleep, which caused lack of concentration and the sudden shock. Thus, the brain works harder to counteract sleep deprivation effects; however, it operates less effectively: concentration levels and alertness drop drastically.
(Alexandre, I reworte the concluding sentence of this paragraph, since the one that you had written described a new idea different from the topic sentence).
(Alexandre) In a second instance, lack of sleep influences a lot the human’s mood during the day. While sleeping our body produces some hormones, like GH(growing hormone), which are responsible to the body’s maintenance. With less hormones and less energy, more cortizol is produced, in order to compensate this situation. This hormone is responsible for providing energy and keep the human awake. However, it is also the cortizol that generates stress. Producing more of this hormone means being more stressed, consequently, more aggressive. It seems obvious that sleep is related with social relationships now (Therefore, sleep is related with social relationships. I think is better this way because it does not seem that you are talking to the reader). (“For instance”: you should always start the example sentences with “for instance”, “for example”) A research made by a group of pshychologists from USP (University of São Paulo) showed that at the work environment ,people who stated (having) good relationship with the work group are (were) 20-30% more efficient at work. As a result, it’s reasonable to affirm that good sleep is very significant to job performance. (I think you the idea of job performance is a new context and you should not include new ideas in the concluding sentence).
(Renata) Third, while some people may believe that a good night sleep is not related to the learning process, studies showed that wakefulness impairs the consolidation of memory. The mechanism was studied by scientists at the University of Pennsylvania. The findings provided evidence that sleep helps regulate neuronal function in the hippocampus, which is responsible for spatial orientation and recognition of physical surroundings, known as contextual memory. According to the study, memory consolidation happens over a period of hours after training for a task, and certain cellular processes have to occur at precise times. For instance, researchers at Beth Israel Deaconess Medical Center (BIDMC) conduct a trial with twelve healthy, college-aged individuals who were taught a sequence of skilled finger movements, similar to playing a piano scale. The subjects were assessed after a 12- hour period of either wake or sleep, respectively, on their ability to recall these finger movements while an Magnetic Resonance Imaging measured the activity of their brain. The end result is that skills such as learning to talk, to coordinate limbs and interpreting sensory and perceptual information become more automatic and require the use of fewer conscious brain regions to be accomplished when the subjects had had a good night of sleep. In conclusion, prioritize studying over sleeping can be less efficacious than expected, since memory consolidation is strictly related to good hours of sleep.
(Renata) Sleep restriction is on the rise in modern culture. Everyday there seems to be twice as much work and half as much time to complete it. The long-term sleep deprivation leads to metabolic alterations which causes physical and mental impairments, such as difficulty to concentrate, to handle stress and irritability, to moderate emotions and to retain information. Bad quality of sleep is, nowadays, a public health issue, since it affects the individual and the environment around him/her. The researches on the benefits of sleeping and how to manage the hazardous effects of its abscence should be continuously studied and people should always think of how to measure the benefits of wakefulness against the consequences, some of them irreversible, of the short sleep. Most adults need 7 to 8 hours of sleep per night. Long periods of sleep disruption may be the cause not only of individual alterations, but also of motor vehicle or work accidents, putting other people in danger, such as what happened in Chernobyl.
A late clock
(Alexandre and Renata) Sleep deprivation can result in nuclear explosions. This is what happened in Chernobyl, Ucrania in April 1986. Along with the huge pressure to complete the tasks within deadlines, the staff was forced to lose hours of sleep in order to maintain their jobs, resulting in lack of attention with the security system and an overheated reactor. The capitalist culture of 24/7 has been leading some people to shorten their period of sleep. In other words, bad quality sleep offers risks to human beings, such as cognitive impairment, emotional disturbances and memory disorders.
(Alexandre and Renata) First, the lack of quality of sleep may result in problems to the human’s cognitive system. In this situation, the attention and the capacity of concentration are sharply decreased and the time of reaction is greatly slowed due to the fact that during the sleep, important hormones, which are related to judgment, impulse control, attention and visual association, act on the prefrontal cortex. For example, on March 25th 1989, Exxon Valdez, an oil tanker, shocked towards a reef on the Alasca shore and two hundred million liters of oil were spilled in the ocean. The tragedy was related to overwork and few hours of sleep, which caused lack of concentration and the sudden shock. The brain works harder to counteract sleep deprivation effects; however, it operates less effectively, making the concentration levels and alertness drop drastically.
(Alexandre) Second, lack of sleep influences the human’s mood during the day as well. While sleeping, our body produces some hormones, like GH known as the growth hormone, which is responsible for the maintenance of our bodies. With less hormones and less energy, more cortizol is produced in order to compensate for this situation. This hormone is responsible for providing energy and keeping the human awake. However, it is also cortizol that generates stress. Producing more of this hormone means being more stressed, consequently, more aggressive. A research (which one in particular?)made by a group of pshychologists from USP (who exactly?), for instance, showed that in the work environment, people who had a good rapport with their workgroup were 20 to 30% more efficient at work. As a result, such results show that a fair amount of sleep is very significant to job performance. (Alexandre, your paragraph is supposed to address emotional stability and it concludes with work performance. I believe you will need to come back to the original proposal delineated by your thesis.)
(Renata) Third, while some people may believe that a good night sleep is not related to the learning process, studies showed that wakefulness impairs the consolidation of memory. The mechanism was studied by scientists at the University of Pennsylvania. The findings provided evidence that sleep helps regulate neurological functions in the hippocampus, which is responsible for spatial orientation and recognition of physical surroundings, known as contextual memory. According to the study, memory consolidation happens over a period of hours after training for a task, and certain cellular processes have to occur at precise times. For instance, researchers at Beth Israel Deaconess Medical Center (BIDMC) have conducted a trial with twelve healthy, college-aged individuals who were taught a sequence of skilled finger movements, similar to playing a piano scale. The subjects were assessed after a 12- hour period of either waking or sleeping, respectively, on their ability to recall these finger movements while an Magnetic Resonance Imaging measured the activity of their brain. The end result is that skills such as learning to talk, to coordinate the limbs and interpreting sensory and perceptual information become more automatic and require the use of fewer conscious brain regions to be accomplished when the subjects had had a good night of sleep. In conclusion, prioritizing studying over sleeping can be less efficacious than expected, since memory consolidation is strictly related to good hours of sleep.
(Renata) All in all, sleep restriction is on the rise in modern culture. Everyday there seems to be twice as much work and half as much time to complete it. The long-term sleep deprivation leads to metabolic alterations which causes physical and mental impairments, such as difficulties to concentrate, to handle stress and irritability, and to moderate emotions and to retain information. Bad quality of sleep is, nowadays, a public health issue, since it affects the individual and the environment around him/her. The researches on the benefits of sleeping and how to manage the hazardous effects of its abscence should be continuously studied and people should always think of how to measure the benefits of wakefulness against the consequences, some of them irreversible, of the short sleep. Most adults need 7 to 8 hours of sleep per night. Long periods of sleep disruption may be the cause not only of individual alterations, but also of motor vehicle or work accidents, putting other people in danger, such as what happened in Chernobyl.
Guys,
Here is the breakdown of your grades.
(Pair work)
Content: 5 / 5
Structure: 5 / 5
Vocabulary: 5 / 5
Grammar: 5 / 5
Mechanics: 5 / 5
Total: 25 / 25
Renata’s portion:
Content: 5 / 5
Structure: 5 / 5
Vocabulary: 5 / 5
Grammar: 5 / 5
Mechanics: 5 / 5
Total: 50 divided by 2 = 25 / 25
Alexandre’s portion
Content: 3 / 5 (You don’t address what your thesis proposed.)
Structure: 2 / 5 (Topic sentence and concluding sentence don’t match your thesis)
Vocabulary: 4 / 5 (You could use more sophisticated vocabulary words)
Grammar: 5 / 5
Mechanics: 5 / 5
Final grade: 19 + 25 = 44 divided by 2 = 22 / 25
A late clock
(Alexandre and Renata) Sleep deprivation can result in nuclear explosions. This is what happened in Chernobyl, Ucrania in April 1986. Along with the huge pressure to complete the tasks within deadlines, the staff was forced to lose hours of sleep in order to maintain their jobs, resulting in lack of attention with the security system and an overheated reactor. The capitalist culture of 24/7 has been leading some people to shorten their period of sleep. Bad quality sleep offers risks to the human beings, such as cognitive impairment, emotional disturbances and memory disorders.
(Alexandre and Renata) First, the lack of quality of sleep may result in problems to the human’s cognitive system. In this situation, the attention and the capacity of concentration are sharply decreased and the time of reaction is greatly slowed due to the fact that during the sleep, important hormones, which are related to judgment, impulse control, attention and visual association, act on the prefrontal cortex. For example, on Mar 25th 1989, Exxon Valdez, an oil tanker, shocked towards a reef on the Alasca shore and two hundred million liters of oil were spilled in the ocean. The tragedy was related to overwork and few hours of sleep, which caused lack of concentration and the sudden shock. Thus, the brain works harder to counteract sleep deprivation effects; however, it operates less effectively: concentration levels and alertness drop drastically.
(Alexandre) In a second instance, lack of sleep influences a lot the human’s emotional state during the day. While sleeping our body produces some hormones, like GH(growing hormone), which are responsible to the body’s maintenance. With its energetic capabiliy harmed, more cortizol is produced, in order to compensate this situation. Such hormone is responsible for providing energy and keep the human awake. However, cortizol is also responsible for the generation of stress. Producing more of this hormone means being more stressed, consequently, more aggressive. Therefore, sleep is related with social relationships. For exanple a research made by a group of pshychologists from USP (University of São Paulo) showed that at work environment ,people who stated having good relationship with the work group are were 20-30% more efficient at work. As a result, it’s reasonable to affirm that sleep is linked to the emotional state of humans during the day.
(Renata) Third, while some people may believe that a good night sleep is not related to the learning process, studies showed that wakefulness impairs the consolidation of memory. The mechanism was studied by scientists at the University of Pennsylvania. The findings provided evidence that sleep helps regulate neuronal function in the hippocampus, which is responsible for spatial orientation and recognition of physical surroundings, known as contextual memory. According to the study, memory consolidation happens over a period of hours after training for a task, and certain cellular processes have to occur at precise times. For instance, researchers at Beth Israel Deaconess Medical Center (BIDMC) conduct a trial with twelve healthy, college-aged individuals who were taught a sequence of skilled finger movements, similar to playing a piano scale. The subjects were assessed after a 12- hour period of either wake or sleep, respectively, on their ability to recall these finger movements while an Magnetic Resonance Imaging measured the activity of their brain. The end result is that skills such as learning to talk, to coordinate limbs and interpreting sensory and perceptual information become more automatic and require the use of fewer conscious brain regions to be accomplished when the subjects had had a good night of sleep. In conclusion, prioritize studying over sleeping can be less efficacious than expected, since memory consolidation is strictly related to good hours of sleep.
(Renata) Sleep restriction is on the rise in modern culture. Everyday there seems to be twice as much work and half as much time to complete it. The long-term sleep deprivation leads to metabolic alterations which causes physical and mental impairments, such as difficulty to concentrate, to handle stress and irritability, to moderate emotions and to retain information. Bad quality of sleep is, nowadays, a public health issue, since it affects the individual and the environment around him/her. The researches on the benefits of sleeping and how to manage the hazardous effects of its abscence should be continuously studied and people should always think of how to measure the benefits of wakefulness against the consequences, some of them irreversible, of the short sleep. Most adults need 7 to 8 hours of sleep per night. Long periods of sleep disruption may be the cause not only of individual alterations, but also of motor vehicle or work accidents, putting other people in danger, such as what happened in Chernobyl.