
Watching crazy hospitals
September 17, 2008 It’s awful when doctors don’t hear their patients, as if they were guardians of truth. Even worse when the client‘s life depends on that information. The reality might sound sad, unfortunately, the majority of our psychiatric public hospitals physicians has nothing to do with doctor House’s competence. An entire environment “forgotten” by the government would, of course, result in precocious diagnoses of normal citizens, lack of hospital structure and a barely prepared staff of doctors. Again the humanity’s friend called corruption is present.
Imagine an innocent, being judged guilty and having to accept the consequences of such an injustice. It’s almost the same thing of judging someone, who might have some esquizofrenic symptoms, as totally crazy, then start to administrate haldol to him. This medication is used to reduce hallucination symptoms at the price of accelerating the famous Parkinson’s disease, depression for the time it is being used. Now, this depression is usually treated with electroshocks, when the Parkinson is not induced, however, haldol can induce this symptom. Whenever nurses realize that the patients are depressed they report to these superb doctors, who order them to start the shock therapy. As a result, the patient is drugged and forced to take unnecessary and inefficient electroshocks.
The psychiatric hospitals are not usually located at the same places of regular ones. The main reason is simple, patients with mind disturbs are potentially dangerous to themselves, other patients, and everyone who may be visiting or walking through the hospital’s grounds. Indeed, São Paulo’s public hospitals are in generall well conserved. By the other hand, sanatories are usually very damaged. There was one called Bom Retiro, at Santa Catarina, who has it’s entrance very well conserved, a lot of green areas, some sunpaths and fountains. But inside the place, a terrible smell due to the constipation caused by the haldol on the patients. Separate rooms for each patient, cleaned once per week, with one almost permanently dirty toilet and a bed with a mattress filled with straw. It’s not required much effort to visualize the food gave to those patients at these emprisonment’s days.
The same sanatory had only one pschyatric responsable for the whole contigent. To control the interns, the crew were nurses who had trainment to control people with disturbs, but not a graduation to effectivelly know what they were doing. Some others sanatories reported deaths due to the wrong admnistration of medicine. One cronic patient suddenly blew out his intestines throught his anus in the middle of the path. Thousands of patients die every year, forgotten by their families, doctors, State.
Some sad information is telling that a huge part of government’s capital invested on health are destined to these kind of institutions. Certainly deal with mental perturbations is a very delicate and complicate task, however , so is to deal with surgeries and massive quantity of going to doctors appointments at public clinics. Corruption is spread on the most nasty areas it could be, merging in a point where pchyatrists don’t even know who really needs treatment.
Alexandre,
I am not quite sure of what you meant by your title.
It’s awful when doctors don’t hear their patients, acting as if they were the guardians of the truth, which is even worse when the client‘s life depends on that piece of information. This reality might sound sad, but unfortunately, the majority of the physicians in our psychiatric public hospitals have nothing to do with doctor House’s level of competence. The government’s ignoring these institutions has certainly resulted in precocious diagnoses of normal citizens, lack of hospital structure, and a set of poorly prepared doctors.
(Alexandre, you are not following the traditional American rhetoric style here. I can’t see a topic sentence or an explanation of your main argument here.)
Imagine an innocent, being judged guilty and having to accept the consequences of such an injustice. It’s almost the same predicament of judging someone who might have some squizofrenic symptoms as totally crazy, and then start to administer Haldol to him, a medication used to reduce hallucination symptoms at the price of accelerating Parkinson’s disease, and depression in the patient during the treatment. This depression (which depresssion? The squizofrenic one?) is usually treated with electroshocks, when the Parkinson is not induced (Is this electroshock treatment efficient in treating the patient?). However, Haldol can induce this symptom (I am lost here. Which symptom?). Whenever the nurses realize that the patients are depressed, they report to these doctors, who order these nurses to start the shock therapy (Is it good or bad?). As a result, the patient is sedated and forced to take unnecessary and inefficient electroshocks. (Where is your concluding sentence?)
(Where is your topic sentence # 2?)
Psychiatric hospitals are not usually located at the same places of regular ones. The main reason is simple: patients with mind disturbances are potentially dangerous to themselves, other patients, and everyone who may be visiting or walking through the hospital’s grounds. Indeed, São Paulo’s public hospitals are in generall well preserved. On the other hand, asylums are usually in pretty bad shape. For instance, the Bom Retiro asylum in Santa Catarina has beautiful entrance with lots of green areas, some sunpaths and fountains. But inside the place, visitors can sense a terrible smell of constipation caused by the Haldol on the patients. The separate rooms for each patient are cleaned only once a week, which consists of a single, almost permanently dirty toilet and a bed with a mattress filled with straw. It’s not required much effort to visualize the food gave to those patients at these emprisonment’s days (What do you mean in this last sentence? Alexandre, you are supposed to offer a concluding sentence here.)
(Where is your topic sentence # 3?) The same institution had only one pschyatrist responsible for the whole contigent. The crew who helped were made of nurses who had trainning to control people with disturbances, but not a full-fledged graduation to effectively know what they were doing. Some others asylums reported deaths due to the wrong admnistration of medicine (which ones?). One chronic patient suddenly blew out his intestines throught his anus (how?). Thousands of patients die every year, forgotten by their families, doctors, the state (So, what are you arguing here? What is the point of this particular paragraph?).
Information tells us that a huge part of the government’s capital invested on health care are destined to these kind of institutions (is it true?). Dealing with mental disturbances is a very delicate and complicate task and so is to deal with surgeries and massive quantity of going to doctors appointments at public clinics (What are you talking about here?). Corruption is spread on the most nasty areas it could be, merging in a point where pchyatrists don’t even know who really needs treatment. (Alexandre, you never really explored the idea of corruption throughout your paper, though. Corruption would be considered a new topic that you are mentioning in your concluding paragraph. What you need is to follow the ideas of the conclusion we discussed in class.)
Alexandre,
I can see that you still did not have time to work on this paper. However, I need to assign it a temporary grade. Here is what it deserves right now.
Content: 3 / 5 (There are some examples missing from your points 2 and 3.)
Structure: 2 / 5 (You are not following the American Rhetorical Structure discussed in class.)
Vocabulary: 4 / 5
Grammar: 4 / 5
Mechanics: 4 / 5
Total: 17 /25
If you are not satisfied with this grade, you have until this Sunday, September 28th 8: 00 p.m. to work on it.
See you,
Rick
It’s awful when doctors don’t hear their patients, acting as if they were the guardians of the truth, which is even worse when the client‘s life depends on that piece of information. This reality might sound sad, but unfortunately, the majority of the physicians in our psychiatric public hospitals have nothing to do with doctor House’s level of competence. The government’s ignoring these institutions has certainly resulted in precocious diagnoses of normal citizens, lack of hospital structure, and a set of poorly prepared doctors.
Everyday normal people are wrongly diagnosed at public sanatoriums. Imagine an innocent, being judged guilty and having to accept the consequences of such an injustice. It’s almost the same predicament of judging someone who might have some squizofrenic symptoms as totally crazy, and then start to administer Haldol to him, a medication used to reduce hallucination symptoms at the price of accelerating Parkinson’s disease, and depression in the patient during the treatment. Depression is usually treated with electroshocks, when the Parkinson is not induced, this eletroshock therapy has a temporal effect, and makes the patient suffer a lot to get few. Haldol usually induces this depression. Whenever the nurses realize that the patients are depressed, they report to these doctors, who order these nurses to start the shock therapy . As a result, the patient is sedated and forced to take unnecessary and inefficient electroshocks. A wrong diagnose might be the sentence for an innocent to suffer horrible tortures.
Every hospital should have at least a minimal condition of cleaness and structure, something that is not conferred to most of these sanatoriums.
Psychiatric hospitals are not usually located at the same places of regular ones. The main reason is simple: patients with mind disturbances are potentially dangerous to themselves, other patients, and everyone who may be visiting or walking through the hospital’s grounds. Indeed, São Paulo’s public hospitals are in general well preserved. On the other hand, asylums are usually in pretty bad shape. For instance, the Bom Retiro asylum in Santa Catarina has beautiful entrance with lots of green areas, some sunpaths and fountains. But inside the place, visitors can sense a terrible smell of constipation caused by the Haldol on the patients. The separate rooms for each patient are cleaned only once a week, which consists of a single, almost permanently dirty toilet and a bed with a mattress filled with straw. It’s not required much effort to visualize the food gave to those patients at these emprisonment’s days, everything cooked in a kitchen sorrounded of roaches. It’s hard to treat patients and get positive results with these low quality environment.
To get a job done, is necessary at least some competent crew to guarantee the tasks.
Bom Retiro had only one psychiatrist responsible for the whole contingent. The crew who helped were made of nurses who had training to control people with disturbances, but not a full-fledged graduation to effectively know what they were doing. Some others asylums reported deaths due to the wrong administration of medicine,it seems that some drugs such triperidol, combined with haldol may result in formation of very corrosive acids. One chronic patient suddenly blew out his intestines thought his anus after complaining of a stomachaches. This episode reinforce the importance of the formation of competent doctors at these hospitals, when the subject is the humans life, no efforts should be saved.
Information tells us that a huge part of the government’s capital invested on health care are destined to these kind of institutions, however, not only money is necessary, but attention. Lives are being ruined, instead of saved due to a irresponsible psychiatry and a blind admnistration.
It’s awful when doctors don’t hear their patients, acting as if they were the guardians of the truth, which is even worse when the client‘s life depends on that piece of information. This reality might sound sad, but unfortunately, the majority of the physicians in our psychiatric public hospitals have nothing to do with doctor House’s level of competence. The government’s ignoring these institutions has certainly resulted in precocious diagnoses of normal citizens, lack of hospital structure, and a set of poorly prepared doctors.
First, everyday normal people are wrongly diagnosed at public sanatoriums. Imagine an innocent, being judged guilty and having to accept the consequences of such an injustice. It’s almost the same predicament of judging someone who might have some squizofrenic symptoms as totally crazy, and then start to administer Haldol to him, a medication used to reduce hallucination symptoms at the price of accelerating Parkinson’s disease, and depression in the patient during the treatment. Depression is usually treated with electroshocks, when the Parkinson is not induced. This eletroshock therapy has an effemeral effect and makes the patient suffer a lot to reach limited results. Furthermore, Haldol usually induces depression. Whenever the nurses realize that the patients are depressed, they report to these doctors, who order these nurses to start shock therapy . As a result, the patient is sedated and forced to take unnecessary and inefficient electroshocks. A wrong diagnose might be the sentence for an innocent to suffer horrible tortures.
Second, every hospital should have at least the minimal condition of cleaness and structure, something that does not occur in most of these sanatoriums. Psychiatric hospitals are not usually located at the same places of regular ones. The main reason is simple: patients with mind disturbances are potentially dangerous to themselves, other patients, and everyone who may be visiting or walking through the hospital’s grounds. Asylums in São Paulo are usually in pretty bad shape. For instance, the Bom Retiro asylum in Santa Catarina has beautiful entrance with lots of green areas, some sunpaths and fountains. But inside the place, visitors can sense a terrible smell of constipation caused by the Haldol on the patients. The separate rooms for each patient are cleaned only once a week, which consists of a single, almost permanently dirty toilet and a bed with a mattress filled with straw. It’s not required much effort to visualize the food gave to those patients at these emprisonment’s days, everything cooked in a kitchen surrounded by roaches. It’s hard to treat patients and get positive results with these low quality environment.
Third, to get a job done, it is necessary at least some competent crew to guarantee the tasks run smoothly. Bom Retiro had only one psychiatrist responsible for the whole contingent. The crew who helped were made out of nurses who had training to control people with disturbances, but not a full-fledged graduation to effectively know what they were doing. Some others asylums reported deaths due to the wrong administration of medicine. It seems that some drugs such triperidol, administered with Haldol may result in formation of very corrosive acids. One chronic patient suddenly blew out his intestines thought his anus after complaining of a stomachaches. This episode reinforces the importance of the formation of competent doctors at these hospitals, when the subject is the humans life, no efforts should be saved.
In conclusion, information tells us (which ones?) that a huge part of the government’s capital invested on health care are destined to these kind of institutions. However, not only money is necessary, but also attention. Lives are being ruined, instead of being saved due to a irresponsible psychiatry and a blind admnistration.
(What are your suggestions then?)
Alexandre,
Congratulations on the progress of this paper. It is amazing to see how much clearer and sophisticated it has gotten after you’ve worked on it.
Rick
Content: 5 / 5
Structure: 3 / 5 (You have to be careful with connectors to signal to the reader where you are going with the paper.)
Vocabulary: 5 / 5
Grammar: 4 / 5
Mechanics: 5 / 5
Total: 22 / 25